This is the song for me. It's real, there's something to it that you just wanna hum along to. You know?
Jan 18, 2010 Rating
good by: Anonymous
I like that it's really real, nothing about it is fake it's intriguing and you can hear the emotion behind it. but i think it looks more like serious poetry than a song. i think for it to be a song it should be a little more "short and sweet" but i can relate to having too many ideas and making the song too long!
Jan 01, 2010 Rating
caleigh's comment by: Anonymous
wow i can so relate to that.
i've tried hard to write down how i feel,
but you've done a better job then me at that.
good job !
Sep 11, 2009 Rating
wow by: Anonymous
i loved this..it relates to me more than anything.
Jun 03, 2009 Rating
A little long and wordy. by: Anonymous
good topic, we all relate.
as as example of being too long and too wordy:
you wrote:
night time becomes my enemy
with it brings all the hurt and regret
all the thoughts about us abandoned
yet still impossible to forget
it's like im stuck in limbo
nowhere to run or to hide
i've taken this too far it seems
broken hearts and broken dreams
I'd write:
the night becomes my enemy
things i can't forget
thoughts of us abandoned
filled with hurt and regret
i'm stuck here in limbo
nowhere to run or hide
broken hearts and broken dreams
is all i have inside
Now i know you wrote the song. I'm not trying to change it.
But if you read through yours and then mine, you may find more of a rhythm in mine vs yours.
This does not make it better.
But, lyrics have to flow even without music.
I have had many discussions/arguments with musicians that claim a song is a song without lyrics. They are wrong. That is an instrumental, not a song. A song is only a song if there are lyrics and they have to flow. Like poetry. It can be a song/poetry without music.
