I think you are really lost that the freedom you write about is an illusion to you. I believe you write out of frustration with your life. That is not a bad thing your lyrics are honest. Good Job!
Jun 12, 2008 Rating
Nice Lyrics by: Esther P.
Your lyrics are open and free, but a little bit scary. I liked it.
Jun 10, 2008 Rating
joy is grand lyrics by: mel
joy is grand lyrics
ok, first off, it's open. free. but i'm missing the care-free or the depth...however, i have a peppy upbeat tune when i look at the words. i could be wrong, i'm not sure, maybe it was ironic goth. fair enough. but i heard happy when i read, so i'll keep on that. i'd say the only true problem i had was the vocabulary- for a happy song (i'm assuming) it should be clear and simple- not saying you can't be well-read or intelligent for happy, but keep it the same. can't throw in a random 'erudite' amongst 'yah yah yas,' though. i will admit. it's fab coming across something positive in a wealth of angst and distrust. i think you should either be wordy, or not so. choose your poison, so to speak. but you definitely have something to say. can't wait to hear/read your next. m.
