I only rated 2 stars because you only have 1 verse. Or is it maybe a chorus?
Anyway, I would reccomend (what somebody else who commented before me did) a story to go with this. Even if you don't tell the story exactly. Just let the listener know there is a reason for why you will "always be there".
Oct 08, 2009 Rating
Brainstorm by: Gino
I was writing a song the other day. And I got stuck on the bridge. So what I did was just asked myself questions about what I wanted to write and I wrote down the answers. I had enough ideas and words to put together a nice bridge.
In your case:
Your one verse (for example): What makes you want to even be there for this person?
Because that person been there for you when it felt like the world was on your shoulders. When things seemed wrong, that person made it right etc... and your prechorus and talk about how you want to thank her for being who she is and the least you can do is give back and be there for that person.
Oct 05, 2009 Rating
:) by: victoria
ii Wrote The first comment btw.
i'll help you. i'm a lyricis.
victoriaaaa@live.co.uk
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Oct 05, 2009 Rating
Well Done by: Anonymous
Well done. Sounds like a professional. As for what to write next... I'm not much help here... Hope you finish it, it's great!
