I see you,re writing from the heart,which is good Buy Jason Blumes 6 steps to songwriting
,It shines light on alot of thingsAndget some lyrics ready for contests that,s where to start.
Good Luck
Dan M
Jun 25, 2009 Rating
You are on the right track by: Doc Haley
Other than the obvious lack of any tune or melody to go with your song, it reads well and smoothly for the most part.
You need to follow the golden rule of Nashville.
These days they expect
Verse
Verse
Bridge
Chorus
Song break
Verse
Chorus
End song
You have all the components but you need to move them around a bit.
It was nice to see you use a realistic approach with the fact in the song that they already have a baby and are getting married. People relate.
Your first verse is.
Verse
Look at all the people
Filling up the pews
They come to watch the preacher man
Marry me and you
All I can do is stand here and smile
As I wait for you
To come walking down the isle
Brief it up to sing more smoothly IMHO:
(play it slowly)
C
Look at all the people filling up the pews
Am
Came to watch the preacher man marry me and you
F
Knees weak heart a pounding, i can't lose this
smile
G
I turn to look and there you are coming down the
C
isle.
It's just a suggestion and the music is just one of those off the head things. Any root chord you feel comfortable in using will work. But you need a tune with it to get any movement.
My contributions are without any liability, enjoy.
Cya
Doc
