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Jun 13, 2011
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Really good
by: John P.

Jody is right about the grammer, but other than that I thought it flowed well and had a story behind it.

Jan 12, 2011
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what a surprise
by: Bobby

I really, really, really, really like this :)

Jul 24, 2010
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Sounds Sad
by: Anonymous

Sounds like a melancholy song. Perhaps get a good melody to it. Will sound good with your words.
Keep writing. Good luck.

Shane

Jun 19, 2010
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nice
by: tmb123

i get the message....but ive been in the situation...i love all of it , and wouldve cryed if i was alone...i held back tears reading ...great job

May 14, 2010
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Sad
by: jodyWayne

I don't know how much writing you've done, but if this is your first, not bad!

First verse is perfect.

Second verse, you may want to change then to when.

First chorus,You completely lost structure ingegrity. I would stop with the first four lines and let it go at that. If you want to say more, write another four lines.

Have you forgot that sin you sinned? < grammar
*Have you forgotten that sin you sinned?
*Did you forget that sin you sinned?

Your other two lyrics may need a little adjusting when you create the music.

Don't finish the song with a (Bridge)
finish with an (Outro)

Remember this: The average casual listener will remember the beginning and the ending of the song. Everything inbetween is just intertainment.
So you want the start and the end to awesome.

Also remember: This really happened to you. You want the listener to feel your pain, and cry with you. So, write it like it is happening now!! Don't be afraid to show emotion. Real emotion!

(I love you! but I hate you! You made me! You made me hate you! Oh, how I want to love you. But I can't. Oh, God I can't...)

Good Luck.
jodyW

May 14, 2010
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