I have been reading some of Doc's posts and I agree with him on them all. Except the ones he posts about me, I'm J/K. Doc and I are seeing very familiar on many of these comments of lyrics. Listen to what he is telling you. I have done many many hours, days, and months of research and study on songwriting and he knows his stuff.
Jun 20, 2009 Rating
Good beginning man. by: Anonymous
You should not start a tune off with what reads like much of the chorus. Change that or just take it out or re-write it. The chorus has to stand alone and you need a bridge to change the tempo and create a build up from the verse to the chorus.
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You wrote:
Memories flooding my head,
The past, familiar face,
I shut them out but they never leave,
Always behind me and I can't run away,
Maybe I should turn back?
But I think of you and keep going,
I'd write:
G
Memories flood my mind from this past familiar face.
D
I shut them out ..... but they never leave.
Always behind me as if we were in a race.
G
Some body come and help me please.
A7
Maybe I should just turn back and face my fears alone.
D
Then i think of you and what we had.
A7
That's why this broken heart of mine will never mend.
G A7 D
It's enough to make a country boy feel sad.
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Now i only write in CW or Hillbilly or CW/Pop. So if you are writing a more deep song, or heavy metal, what i have written won't apply. But it will give you a different spin on your lyrics message.
If more song writers (those that write lyrics) would put a simple chord structure to them with some sort of tempo, it would help them first of all. Because when they have to put a tune to a set of lyrics, the whole world changes. They will see the difference I have been talking about on many many posts.
